I can be the sunshine
to someones day
or the cloud
that never goes away.
I am tropical weather
With unpredictable changes
Coming and going
My moods are the weather
Changing,
with no warning
I am tropical weather
Oblivious to things around me
Affecting others
without realizing
My tears are the rain
Only temporary with pain
I am tropical weather
Walking around
affecting others around me
Brightening someones day,
is how I choose to slay
Ever-changing, outgoing, oblivious
I am tropical weather
I really like you're rhyming because it's not obvious and it makes the poem flow. I do like the hook, but sometimes a hook could sound too repeatative and make the poem drag, but it's up to you if you want to change it. Overall the poem shows a lot of great comparisons and it flows very well. Good job!
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